Two part question essay…student comparison, with examples!…

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Another day, another lesson…or something like that. In this tutorial, I take a good essay from a student and show one or two minor tweaks to make it even better….the grammar and vocab are good, it’s just the task achievement that might cost a point or two….I post the files below…and the video at the bottom of the page. Any questions, write to the usual address kevin@prepareielts.com…


The question…

It is often said “when in Rome, do as the Romans do”.

Do you think people should adapt/accept the culture of the country they visit?

Do you think it is possible to learn a new culture without learning the language?


Example 1..

The well known expression “When in Rome” is usually taken to mean that a person should respect and adapt to local customs when visiting a new place. I think that travellers should not only understand this but should research such customs before travelling, to avoid any cultural misunderstandings. I would also argue that as language and culture are interconnected, only a superficial understanding of any culture is possible without knowing the language.

When travelling, tourists should remember they are guests in that country and they need to be sensitive to local customs and traditions. Visitors have no automatic right to behave as they would at home, yet many tourists fail to find out what is acceptable in the places they visit. Many Westerners like to drink alcohol and to dress in revealing garments especially in hot weather, however, in some parts of the world this behaviour would be perceived as an insult to the host population. For example, a survey by hoteliers in Dubai in 2015 said that over consumption of alcohol and guests wearing unsuitable clothing were the number one causes of complaint against tourists.

As well as respecting cultural sensitivities, another question is can an outsider really understand a new culture without also speaking the language? The answer is that without language, only a shallow superficial knowledge of any culture is possible. For many tourists, this is perfectly fine as they are only passing through rushing from one tourist hotspot to another. For example, as the Lonely Planet website survey shows, many expats and longterm residents choose to learn at least some of the local language as they want a real “authentic” cultural experience beyond the surface comprehension experienced by tourists.

In conclusion, respecting the cultural practices of the host country is very important, it is recommended that visitors should research what these are before travelling. Also, at least attempting to master some of the language is a must to truly appreciate another culture and it’s traditions.

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Example 2..

Travelling is one of life’s greatest pleasures, but people are often expected to adjust their behaviour according to the countries they go to. This essay will firstly discuss the importance of adapting and respecting local customs, followed by an analysis of the role that a language plays in understanding the culture it relates to. 

 

Owing to the fact that every country has her own set of rules and traditions that determine whether or not certain behaviour is acceptable, people should make every effort so as not to offend the native people. For example, there have been many occasions where westerners travel to the Middle East and they get arrested for indecent sexual behaviour that would have otherwise been morally acceptable in their home countries. However, this is not to say that people ought to change their principle values and beliefs. Nevertheless, displaying considerations towards the local community may help eliminate any unnecessary disturbances throughout their visit and enable them to have a pleasant stay.

 

There are many ways a person can gain a deep understanding about a new culture, however this will be highly unlikely if they do not make any effort to learn the language associated with it. A language serves as a means of communication, and the way people speak and express their thoughts can be a vital source of information about their customs and traditions. In addition, learning a new language is a good way of immersing ourselves into the culture. If people are able to converse fluently with the locals, they tend to be more willing to show and share about their daily lives. Finally, a great proportion of cultural and history books have yet to be translated to other languages and one could be missing out on invaluable opportunities to acquire knowledge and insights contained in these books.

 

In conclusion, for reasons related to ensuring the convenience of a person’s stay abroad, it is essential that they adapt and avoid conducting offensive behavioural activities. Learning the local language also proves to be of great importance if one wishes to have an in-depth knowledge about a particular culture.

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